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Buried Alive

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Reflecting only hues of gray
These walls bring thoughts of cloudy days
A raging storm of hail and wind
Within my soul, they bare my sin

My dreams have simply slipped away
Hopes of freedom encased in gray
Bars of steel I cannot breach
Stagnant air, beyond my reach

Buried alive in this grave of stones
Gray ashes replace my weary bones
Years removed from the life I lead
These walls now match my graying head

I curse my eyes and welcome night
At dawn of day, gray greets the light
My life will end one sunny day
Then from gray walls I’ll drift away

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Picture credit - http://capeygirl.deviantart.com/art/Alcatraz-63426324

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  • BluesMan gold member
    October 11

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    You have captured the void of gray with an excelent rhythm and flow throughout. I really liked your metaphor of stormy weather for the chaos churning in the mind.
    Thank you so much for entering my contest.

    Bill


  • Draig aine gold member
    September 29

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    stunned to silence

    we shall drift away or will we depart in a whirlwind, I think I shall just fade into a grey Nova Scotia fog, bravo my friend


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    September 25

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    This was really good. I enjoyed reading this one. It was very moving. I would have too say that this is my favorite part:

    My dreams have simply slipped away
    Hopes of freedom encased in gray
    Bars of steel I cannot breach
    Stagnant air, beyond my reach

    It was really hard too pick one part to be my favorite, because overall this was really good.


    • An Old Codger gold member
      September 25
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      Thank you very much for reading and for such a nice comment. I do appreciate it.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    September 25

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    So wonderfully flowing...the rhyme is seamless...the imagery is amazing!

    You took the pic and made gave it life.


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 22

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    This is such a pensive, melancholic piece - a wonderful response to the prompt, for sure. I would imagine those stark gray walls would weigh heavily on a soul. Good luck in the contest, my Friend.




    • An Old Codger gold member
      September 25

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      Thanks yet again for reading my work and for your continued support.


  • rbruce gold member
    September 21
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    Wow! A wonderful take on the prompt poem. I was almost there within those gray walls.

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