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~~Autumn Nights~~ ( Haiku)

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crisp nights
evening frost fortells
winters approach

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  • Swan song gold member
    October 10
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    amd t was cold i like this poem simple and yet perfect in many ways


  • Maureen silver member
    October 1

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    This haiku is perfectly fine, Sis! BEST OF LUCK in this contest!!!

    Love and Hugs, zzz
    ♥ Maureen


  • Noir mariposa...x gold member
    September 23

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    *shudders*

    Ima going to disagree with those below me - I really don't like Winter

    I love this poem though;
    very pretty in how it's written :]

    ^^

    Good luck with your entry;
    Claire x


  • Melodies
    September 22

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    Winter is my favorite because we have no winter in California and only a cooling off, and your poem made me smile at the thought.


  • melphleg gold member
    September 22

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    ahh my favorite season. Well described in a few words.


  • Malabu
    September 22

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    lovely ku blushie...yes the crisp air and morning frost surely lets us know winter is near..
    lovely images here
    mal


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    September 22

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    Aha--the crisp nights speaks to the chill on the fingers
    still wielding the hose on the planters, as day's sun dries.

    Perfectly expressed, Susan!


  • AngelBellerose gold member
    September 21

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    Love the thought in words you told
    like a sting of frost bitten the winters nose
    love this Ku .. you penned it well
    Hugs Hun Angel♥


  • crivanea silver member
    September 21

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    how about "setting sun?" instead of crisp night? or "sunset begins" or "day ends" or something to contrast evening and morning..and winter and summer? "summer sun dies" ? just suggestions ...love it sis keep on penning

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