The beauty of the garden soil
To make a woman to spin and toil
Is picked up by the god
Tall, beautiful, and thin as a rod
She materialized upon Adam?s demand
Made from the most beautiful of garden sand
With long shin hair of black
That came to the middle of her maple colored back
Her Blue eyes sparkled in the sun
As she whispered to Adam "Come now love let's have some fun"
She was such a beauty Adam?s mind went into remission
When this Siren refused submission
In Hatred Adam convinced god to make Lilith go
Pity on him that he didn't know
That his pretty first wife
Would take revenge without a knife
SO now my children say your prayers
And know that God will count all your hairs
Hope that when you are bad you are beaten
For if you are not you will be eaten
Because When Lilith was found the very next day
She had made the children of Eve her prey
Author notes
I lIked the story of Lilith!
Written April 6th, 2004
A contest entry
- ~*Lilith*~ by poisonsilver.
800 points, ended April 18, 2004, 7 entries
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I thought this was really good, the rhyme works really well and I liked the iagery too. Good write, keep it up
Rosie x -
Damn Click.. I'm all for freedom of religan and all.. But don't you think your taking it a BIT to far????
Lilli
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iceberg!!!
it is interesting to know the origin of the first cannibal
where are her descendants today
I guess the Flood got them.
It is a shame that Noah did not book them passage on the Titanic. -
oh yeah
she is the eater of children
she is the devourer of worlds
she is not lilith
she is merely IT and written by Stephen King. -
Good rendition of the story of Lilith, your rhyme is a little forced in some places but otherwise it's great. Good luck in the contest.
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wow this is such a cool poem! great job!
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