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a place with no sky ii

 

and one million times the world of children fall

one million more from a million others,

each as miniscule as a thought

in sadness disguised space ships and

all as translucent as the moment.

 

and the sea of children drown

the city in tiny caressing touches

dripping stories

and matching the cold on undead fingertips

reaching for freedom from

within visible storage containers.

 

Serene static mesmerizing an entire culture

as each member stares out

trapped by transparent

programmed idiosyncrasies

and echoing the city's tranquilized discontent.

 

Discontent

that resonates from platitudes of infinite regressions

and diamond-sistered memories of the future.

Cold and remnant.

Deceased of action.

 

And I am a child of this night

having learned dissappointment

through organic monsters and their

discontented resolutions.

Even through my tears I cannot calm them

or heal them

or their children

or their misconstrued interpretations

of eternal moments spent

dancing in mazes through the night:

ceremonial disrespect to freedom

held aloft by a stream of conscious whisper

rooted in Gibraltar's rock.

 

When a lie

truly becomes the truth,

when you believe so hard

in alternate realities,

every resonance of who we wanted to be is

self-deceived

and remains crypted.

And everything but our self remains resident.

Each window into the past

each promise for a future

now aflame

as the dark night weeps

and the memories melt away.

 

If only my memories

lingered as buildings

and my prayers

answered as people...

 

 

 

 

Author notes

http://myjavamania.deviantart.com/art/Buildings-14908247

each memory of what was or could have been is a family, stored in crying, burning buildings of our mind...

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  • Okay wow. I'm reading your poem three or four times, and multi tasking watching RENT, in the scene where Maureene gives her rant on stage and is being all philsophical and stuff. Wow that was a lot to take all at once This is a really thought wrenching poem. Hrm..wow. Not often am I left speechless but you have baffeled me. Great job!!!!!

    ej

  • Tyc
    September 29
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    Nicely done my friend. Very Moving.


  • Ealdwyne
    September 27

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    The darkness of truth underlying the lines is amazing,
    the lies we all believe keeps us mired in our chaos.
    well written my friend, truly moving.


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 25

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    Ooooo a version ii !!! Damn... another mind blowing diaglogue...

    You are an amazing writer. Write more!!!


  • SpydurPoet gold member
    September 24

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    This was one of the most powerful poems I have ever read. I was captivated in the truth and sorrow from beginning to end. Stunning.
    Write on.
    ~*~SP~*~


  • Matt E. Smith gold member
    September 21

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    great poem I enjoyed reading it...you seem to have a way of creating great imagery in a really intelligent way. I thought your AN was also very cool and had a poetic flare


  • sweet arrival gold member
    September 21

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    i am going to figure out a way to record this and post it for you... as long as i can keep the tears noiseless. my voice gets all crackly when i get choked up. this is absolutely gorgeous read out loud... and i like this more, but im not even sure of the differences without looking at the other again, and maybe even side by side. just wonderful, mr soze

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