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An Aging Knight's Quest (Sonnet #68)

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My knight whose armor’s dulled by age and rust,

Whose hair that once was black is streaked with gray,

Go face the dragon if thou feel thou must,

And take with thee my love, be safe I pray.

Thy mind wells up with deeds of long-gone past.

It’s thinks just as it did long years ago,

And conjures up a dream that cannot last

Of hero’s deeds and lost bravissimo.

Alas thy sway-backed steed stands ready there,

And eyes thee with a forlorn look of dread.

Yet unlike thee he seems to be aware

That senselessness could leave thee both quite dead.

My foolish knight, please heed my fervent plea.

Forsake thy quest, and spend the night with me.

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Sometimes the past clouds our present and makes us want to do things that can no longer be done. Bless those who bring us to our senses.

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  • Darianna
    October 5

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    Sometimes it's better to stay behind and be safe and warm with the one you love, than going off to fight battles that perhaps need not be fought. Love it dad! Love it! xxx

  • Judith Chandler
    September 23

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    On the other hand, some of us want to do the things we never thought to do when we were young. If we look a bit rididulous, who cares? At least give it a try, if it's enjoyable. That's the philosophy I am evolving.

    Enjoyed your write very much.


  • TheCSIgurl
    September 23
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    I stand corrected - after reading this through more closely, I can see that the rhythm is just fine!

  • Purrsanthema
    September 22

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    This is just lovely! I enjoyed it from the picture, the lettering and the body of the poem itself. The detail of the leery sway backed horse was charming! Best of luck in the contest!


  • lindaburns gold member
    September 22

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    I know this knight.  He is still brave.
    But now he’s a little near sighted.
    He’s not weak. Just not as strong
    as he was. Maybe he could come
    open this jar and kill that spider.
    Ooohhh . . . I would feel so appreciative.


  • Veronica Leigh
    September 21

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    this is so amazing as always. what prompted this if you don't mind me asking??

    beautifulness though, really. I love it

  • TheCSIgurl
    September 21

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    Nice! I dig it

    Your rhythm was somewhat off in some places, but apart from that, the poem was wonderful. I really enjoyed reading it, as I found it light-hearted and fun. Plus, I also love the dialect that you put in!

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