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Barney and the Kingfisher



He asked me did I love him, you know.
  Midnight.
     Twelve minutes before he died.



I am awake
like flicking on a switch
clicking into wakefulness –
my brain flooding into the world -
the world flooding into my brain
I have lost control of every part of it
what once was
a perfectly functioning mind and body


First thoughts –
alone


One week until the equinox
a touch of autumn frost
a gloriously sunny Sunday
sun sun sun
Sol

John…

I am light - all-powerful sunlight
instantaneous
radiant
flowing effortlessly
into the darkest corners of the universe
     capable of seeing
           illuminating
                  understanding

                             everything

I am a huge intelligence encompassing all things
looking down on the rest of humanity
mere pinpoints on the map of life
moving back
and back

  ~~~

You hear it before you see it
that staccato peeping so distinctive.
A kingfisher, I say, pointing -
there, on that broken branch, iridescent beauty,
the light filtering through the trees
in the same way meaning comes through language
dappled

Suddenly it dives
aiming with a half-appalling sense of violation
straight into the leafy depths
driving minute particles of lake water
at high velocity
into ever-increasing circles

  ~~~

The leaves have started turning on the trees -
I distinctly remember them changing colour last fall


And I think to myself in retrospect
so that is a year



























Barney and the Kingfisher
©crisstiena

Author notes

Poem prompt: just a breath of autumn frost

In memory of my friend John, who died last spring leaving his partner
(Barney) of 31 years wondering what life is all about.
Kingfishers, I told him, and autumn frost...

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  • Topaze gold member
    September 27

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    Thank you for this wonderful entry. My best wishes.

  • tara wilson gold member
    September 24

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    "in the same way meaning comes through language
    dappled"

    powerful, moving poetry, i so admire your lines breaks and use of page, and the metaphor...
    what a beautiful poem...amazing. i love your work..i totally have felt the ending before..


  • zt
    September 23

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    So who is this "Barney"? This poem seemed to wander around, taking interesting twists and turns, each leaving images that beckon for more. I think kingfishers are interesting birds. They have longer bills than tails, which is unusual. The aquatic ones have egg shaped corneas that allow them to see equally well in air or water. Can't say I've ever heard one peep. Now I'm curious to hear what makes it so distinct. ~smile~


  • Sonja
    September 22

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    I am so glad that I start to read your poetry. It is really nice and refreshing like I found a different tree in the wood and I said AH!
    Wonderful poetry.


  • Balldinger silver member
    September 21

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    you brandish the poetic pen like a symphonic conductor, madam poet. all is music; all is timing; all is rhythm; all is full of respect and the lending of one's heart, self and soul. standing ovation from the balcony and i'm jumping real soon.

    the last line in italics (really?)... something more, I know it... wonderful piece.


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 21

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    This is incredible, my Friend. Completely beautiful. Good luck in the contest, Sweetie.



  • Rowan gold member
    September 21
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    you are amazing...
    *shakes her head in awe*

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