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I am a Corner

I am a corner, but I can't see
My eyes are blinded by light and me
I am at the top and I should see all
But I fear the heaven and I may fall

I am a foundation built under the ground
The Earth consumed me all around
I am strong enough to hold you high
I am here so that you'll never die

I am a stone in the pyramids wall
Holding you high so you won't fall
I take my place and stucure stands
You can be risen by the help of our hands

I am a corner, with love around me
My eyes are opening by the light of day
Secrets of the universe, they astound me
Oh the cosmos, take me away

We are the stones that will raise you high
That you might learn how to fly
Over the universe, eternal night
Great architecht of all thats right

I am a corner, tell me why
I am an all seeing eye
You gave me your life ,I learned how to fly
I learned how to live and never to die

We will save you from destruction and fall
We are a mountain, we are a wall
So when you hear the heavens call
Remember we're with you and you will not fall

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  • MJ Forgives
    October 30

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    I like your poem so much. It cheered me up your poem did. I hope you do well in my contest and thanks for entering. Love and Peace!
    -Jess

  • Haret5
    October 17

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    Very Nicely Done

    I liked your poem especially the last verse. It is very interesting. I think you did well with rhyming. My suggestion is be wary of typos like a certian comma.


  • happy kitty kat
    October 17

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    "I am a corner, but I can't see
    My eyes are blinded by light and me" that was the best line, i feel you could have made the form flow a bit better, once you get the rhyme beat in your head, if you readd something that doesnt follow, it gets you all mixeed up. very good write though very interesting


  • The Dark Writer
    October 17

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    great

    I really like this poem, it's very imaginitive and you have obviously spent a lot of time thinking it though. I find it hard to be critical about a great work like this, keep writing them.


  • Oleander
    September 21
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    Amazing

    Just keep writing more. That was an amazing poem.

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