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The Alley Part 10 (9-16-09)

Stares out at tha wall
all in a daze
until I was nudged

Momentarily I had truly forgotten
the place at which I was

Look to tha right of me
ad try to hide a smile
even though by his expression he was worried

Muffled words of "Are you ok. What's wrong?"
"I'm just fine, I had zoned out"

Hear him murmur I don't like that
I give him a strange look, hoping he hadn't noticed

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