A single little circumstance;
Surely it’s mere happenstance;
Events that follow just by chance,
No reason to think other.
A simple nod, as eyes do meet;
An exchange of words when they greet;
Their interaction is but fleet;
A fateful introduction.
A miniscule delay in time,
Unlinks the chain on which we climb.
Secondary route is now the prime;
On path we’re now committed.
Forward look assumes direction;
Rearview mirror provides reflection,
Of choices made or their rejection,
On altered course of life.
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Comments
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Oh, I like this. I like the sound; the rhyme and rhythm. Backward Glance demonstrates how our choices can change our path from the way we thought it might be going.
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Yes, that's just how it is...! how strange are the ways of the heart...we are a unique species if ever there were one, are we not!
Lovely poem my friend nicely constructed and presented; and the message, well c'est la vie!
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I like
your word selections for the rhyme. It reads as if it is on a "path committed" Good stuff.
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Great flow, and rhyme scheme.
The message is wonderful...I read this several times...and liked it more each time I read it...thanks for sharing your talent...hope to see you again and again!
Best wishes in the contest and always!
Write on and on!
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oh - no constructive criticism - I liked how you have done this and would not change anything.....my personal opinion.
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I like the depth and the rhyme scheme on this - most unusual, at least to me. I like the flow of the rhyming lines, then the 'conclusion'/impact of the final line. I especially like your last verse.....great ending.
Nice job
thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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Really cool. I like the impact in the end lines, not having a rhyming word, and the general impact from the content. Well done.
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Oh I really liked this and yeah very clever rhyme scheme! I really enjoyed reading this the flow was awesome(always good for a poem
) and yeah I just really enjoyed it!
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Very Cleaver Rhyme Scheme!
A very enjoyable read. I have written a few poems like this. Am sure there must be a fancy name for it. I, of course, thought it was an original style. LoL Sometimes it is just simply appropriate. Nice Write... Right? Howard
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That's very interesting. No wonder I like your poetry. I actually copied the rhyme scheme from one of my favorite writers. This the link to one of my favorites of his. You'll recognize that's where I got it from.
http://www.authspot.com/Poetry/On-the-Lonely.906471
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