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I want to write a perfect love song-
one that soars above the mundane,
and that transports a jaded listener
to a place where happiness swells
until it feels it must burst it's shell.

I want to write the perfect love poem-
expressing something that I feel
all the way down to the depths of soul;
transcending negatives I live with daily
and forcing light into my dark corners.

It seems that all my chances for this kind of love
have been stillborn or died a slow sad death.
So as I wave goodbye to yet another former lover
I wonder if I even know what I wish to write.
Whether I have ever felt the adoration
that I see in the eyes of the bride
as she walks the aisle with her new husband.

So, my latest love, I wish you the feelings
of being totally immersed in another's life.
I let you go with a poignant mix of pride and pain
and fervent wishes that you find the things
that escaped me so many times in my life.
Be forever happy and sing that perfect love song.

 

 

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Not necessarily a true story.
Prompt is: 20a:I wish you love.

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  • Dalaney gold member
    October 25

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    I'm reading this at two in the morning, and darn it, you gave me a lump in my throat. True or not, this poem touches every part of the heart and soul.

    Love, L

  • Nicely done. This was really good and rather interesting. I would have too say that this is my favorite part:

    It seems that all my chances for this kind of love
    have been stillborn or died a slow sad death.
    So as I wave goodbye to yet another former lover
    I wonder if I even know what I wish to write.
    Whether I have ever felt the adoration
    that I see in the eyes of the bride
    as she walks the aisle with her new husband.


    Overall this was good!


  • Everlasting Ellen
    September 28

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    Very pretty. but some how that black background, contradicts the poem. because In this poem I read tenderness and bitter sweetness.

    very well written, thankyou for entering