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Pirate Tale

Lend me y'ur ear as ye hear me tell tale,
‘Tis only by chance that I be alive.
I share it with you as I raise me ale,
For only a few were left to survive.
Slate skies were grey as we set out to sea,
The canvas was stretched o’er mizzen mast.
We pledged to follow the captain's decree
As he screamed the order; “swabbies avast”!
The needle spun free ‘neath the brass rimmed glass,
Our ship lost at sea the waves crashed on deck.
Neptune was crushing our small schooner class,
We knew we'd all drown; a hopeless shipwreck.
     I raise me ale and I snicker at you;
     Believe me tale? Then ye drank too much brew.

 

 

 

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  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    October 15

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    Such a sweet sonnet I am printing it for Aneka. Pretty sure she will enjoy this! Great job and I must repeat myself [sorry] to make a point. Your diversaty in style and contents amaizes me.

    LOVELY!!!!

    Becks

  • Eusebius
    October 5

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    Oh, oh, this wonderful sonnet made me smile MOST broadly, indeed!
    "The needle spun free ‘neath the brass rimmed glass..."
    Man that IS just a great line {be sure I don't steal it matey! ) A terrific piratic tale and a great poem!


  • Desire gold member
    September 30

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    Holy Moly~


    You just go on with Your Talented Self
    Excellent Sonnet in Lingo I would not be able
    to weave no matter how many brewskies I drank
    Loved the direction You took with this prompt!


    Excellent once again!
    Keep that quill dancing

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent
    Best wishes in the contest
    with love & light~ Desire~*~


  • JinSays gold member
    September 29

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    you're funny.
    this is fun, and I am sick right now, so I can use all the fun I can get.
    I wish you all the best.
    love,
    jin


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 25

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    Another fabulous write! You know what.. I read this aloud in a pirates voice as I read it haha... and it worked so briliantly! You've captured the style and spun a fab tale!


  • PerVirtuous
    September 23

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    This tale is almost as big as the one-armed fisherman demonstrated his fish to be!

    The needle spun free ‘neath the brass rimmed glass,

    That line is so good I expect I will steal it someday. I hope to see you at the Pirate's Ball. Harrrrr!


  • Black Rose Thorn
    September 21

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    I LOVE this style of writing! Pirates rule the world!


  • awannabepoet
    September 21

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    Alas, you been dipping your pretty lips into too much brew.

    Ah what a pirate's tall tale you do tell for a schooner lost at sea with all hands
    oh my a finer tale would there to be told perhaps only Moby Dick would truly know.


    awannabepoet


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    September 21

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    The ending was very funny and it's great how you incorporated all
    this pirate talk in the sonnet-form.

    Great job!


  • poisonivystar4
    September 20

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    I love the surprise ending!


  • Rend the Veil gold member
    September 20

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    Ayee Amera,

    Ti's truly a beautiful spun tale,
    and no i didn't drink the ale,
    i read the details, sometimes
    your creativity is just so dang
    astonishing, i shake my head,
    and wish, i was that good!!
    your blessed

    with love and blessing always

    Rend


  • Haygood gold member
    September 20

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    Aye, this sails atop of the mass, it does. Ya be no land lubber. Ah fine one,aye?


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 20

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    N'er a more truthful ward been said. I swear on me darlin's life, for I was there.

    Well done, me friend.

    Buddy


  • nordicsky silver member
    September 20

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    Pirate tale... as soon as I saw the title I poured myself a glass of rum and went into pirate mode. No inept pirate I. If I captured you, I would not chain you in the brig and feed you hard tack and brackish water. For you, fine silks and pillaged gems, fine linen, wine, and lavish food. I would teach you seamanship and navigation, show you how to fight with cutlass and pearl handled pistols and you would teach me poetry. We would sail the moonlit Caribbean, carouse in taverns in Hispaniola, and out sail, and out gun French treasure ships.

    I hope you don’t suffer from sea sickness.

    Love, Peter


    • Amera gold member
      September 20
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      Never been sea sick and I'm there with you


  • ennovy silver member
    September 20

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    this is a very beautifully written sonnet, and I could vividly see
    the ole pirate drinking his ale, ranting about his demise of his
    crew out at sea...an excellent poem...novy


  • Legend silver member
    September 20

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    A typical old sea dogs tale to gain a a free drink I believe not his words,but perhaps after a couple more
    As ever i drag out the Rubber stamp
    EXCELLENT


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    September 20

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    Aye Aye Mates
    Bloody Scallywags, listen to me Captain
    Stop Swabbing the decks
    Drop me anchor
    Now bow to thee
    Thy "Queen of Form"

    LOL
    Another great tale that you have
    woven together in a spledid sonnet
    Your Pirate Language is cool

    Ye Filthy Brethrens
    Grab thee ale and toast thy Poetess

    Now hoist the sails, I have the coordinates
    Set a course Noth East 20 degress
    The treasure we seek is a book, "Poetic Goddess"
    by thy "Queen of Form" fame and fortune awaites
    if we can avoid Davy Jones's Locker...Arg

    LOL...You sparked my Pirate muse
    Great write
    Bravo
    Wish you the best in the contest
    Much love my friend

    David


  • StarEyes
    September 20

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    Oh sis, you are something! What a great read this one is! I love it! But you are the Form Queen, and you do them better than any other on the site!!! What a great job you did here!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Hikari Lady
    September 20

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    This was amazing, lol, Loved the two last lines and the language you used. It was exactly like a pirate would speak. Fantastic, such a wonderful, funny and well penned sonnet. <3

    Love
    ~Noor


  • cricketjeff gold member
    September 20

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    Avast there me heartie!

    I'll scrb down yer maindeck and hoist yer mainsails

    Great stuff


  • crivanea silver member
    September 20

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    i think i've written 2 sonnets in my life...and neither are good lol!! wonderful piece here poet! now i'm gonna go find myself some rum


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 20

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    L.O.L. AARRRRGG!!!

    ME LIKEYS! l.o.l. this was great, and funny..penned with a nice rhythmic flow to it..way to go sweetheart, another very enjoyable write..


  • Ken-Maverick
    September 20

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    Good to see you writing more often now buddy,
    Wonderfully done as always.
    All the best.

    Ken

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