On and On and On by Aesthete2000 at All poetry

Snatch the light
the daytime steam
the street light's glow
the midnight dream

Chance the dance
the frantic race
the fun on the run
the hectic pace

Dare the vision
the star that is you
the performance of life
the applause overdue

Live the moment
be your ultimate
on and on and on
with no regret

Don't stop...

Author notes

Prompt: " Don't Stop Believin'"
(in yourself, for on and on and on
lasts only so long...)

Graphics by Aesthete2000

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A contest entry

Journey by cutetetoune. 475 points, ended October 24, 11 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

Words come alive when answered in kind.

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words-n-stuff
September 30

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I liked the minimilist form of this piece and it's rhythmic feel and flow. Short and to the point. Could be a song ..... favourite stanza is the opening lines -
'Snatch the light
the daytime steam
the street light's glow
the midnight dream'

VGood stuff !!
- Aesthete2000
  September 30
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  The piece was inspired by Journey's "Don't Stop Believin'"---
  which echoed in 80s memories of my mind as my fingers
  hit the keys!
  
  Thanks, I liked those lines, also, the light, the glow!!
  They set the pace for the others to follow!1
  
  M-C
Aesthete2000
September 28
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cutetetoune
September 28
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I really like the rhyme and the feel of this. Great write. Thanks for entering and good luck
- Aesthete2000
  October 25
  
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  You had great entries!
  thank you for the bronze.
  
  M-C
- Aesthete2000
  September 28
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  Thank you. I rather enjoyed the moment!!
Mari Goes
September 21

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Yes, very good thoughts to which I agree
- Aesthete2000
  September 22
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  Out thoughts do travel on the same path
  at times, right?
  
  M-C
arafura
September 21
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Very true, poet!
- Aesthete2000
  September 22
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  Glad you agree, John!
  
  M-C
Summer52
September 20

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a never-ending journey... to the place where it takes you...on and on and on.... we should therefore... NOT STOP... that will lasts only so long...

hmmm.... Mumsy... I could have dance all night to the beat of your song....

Good luck !
- Aesthete2000
  September 21
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  Right, as years move on
  we treasure those moments
  even more. Words to move by!!
  
  Mumsy
Pisces rainbow
September 20

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love that song
get up and go feeling here
makes you want embrace the world
very uplifting
love love your rhyme
a delight
God bless you my friend...
- Aesthete2000
  September 21
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  Thank you, Kathy1
  
  The words were in my head
  bursting to get out
  and link together
  in light and movement!
  
  M-C
pixiestix
September 20

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This is wonderful Aes. Seize the moments and make them yours...get out your pom poms as you remind us all and cheer us on.

I had a fortune cookie fortune pinned to my refrigerator for the longest time. It simply read "Don't Stop Now". My oldest actually based her college application essay around it which was a surprise since I had it posted more for me. She told me how she would notice it and how some days it fueled her to keep going.

Someone will read these words you've written and they will make a difference in some way...a positive one.

Great work here!
- Aesthete2000
  September 21
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  We all need encouragement,
  even daily!! And lucky we are
  to either receive or empart
  that little push or shove.
  
  Observant Liz, picking up on
  Mom's message and making it
  her own.
  
  Some look for big signs to
  help them find their way,
  while the truly wise note
  even the smallest encouragement!
  
  Thank you, pix,
  
  Aes
- - pixiestix
    September 21
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    A little encouragement goes a long way. Daily is ideal. Sometimes the billboards are necessary in life especially at crossroads and difficult times.
Rick Weston
September 20

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snatch the light, chance the dance, dare the vision, live the moment - such encouraging, challenging hope filled words you share in this piece. nicely done.
- Aesthete2000
  September 21
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  The teacher in me, the encourager,
  often takes over as the words
  fall in place!
  
  I like the way you created a synopsis
  by grouping the four initial lines!
  
  Thank you for sharing your thoughts,
  
  M-C
UncleDunk
September 20

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Dare the vision
the star that is you
the performance of life
the applause overdue

This stanza is the heart of the poem, the poem within the poem. This poem had a fast pace to it, which I quite enjoyed. I had started reading it slowly, but no, it wouldn't let me. It simply flew off my tongue like a bird released from it's cage.
- Aesthete2000
  September 21
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  Oh, Unc, love how you expressed that!!
  Yes, sometimes the words have a need
  of their own and I serve as referee,
  matching them up, arranging the rhymes
  before they fly away out of control!
  
  Thank you for the most interesting comment!
  
  M-C
Jayde1
September 20

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wow
what a fantastic poem....
excellent flow and rhyme....
with a beautiful message to live by...

as always my friend you pen a great write

keep up the great work

inspiring!!!!

Jayde
- Aesthete2000
  September 20
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  Oh, Jayde, thank you so much.
  
  The song wouldn't leave me along
  until I played with the words!!
  
  I hope everything is working out
  well for you!!!!
  
  M-C
Yemassee
September 20

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Ah, when you said journey, you meant that Journey! I thought you meant it in a traditional sense. Now you are taking me back to my young adult years...that long ago, wow, someone slow this silly planet's rotation down!

Wise words for everyone...have hope, always work toward your goal, your dreams. I think I might just listen this time. Cool graphics, especially the fancy purple one.
- Aesthete2000
  September 20
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  Hah! Journey as to the patio and back!!!
  
  Summer Theater memories for me. It was the time when some church
  groups were being persued for printing song books. We got by on an
  imminent need clause that would allow buying just one copy of the sheet music
  if there wasn't time before rehearsals to obtain copies for all the cast.
  Hah! Cast of 100s! My music director would hand write the music on ditto
  and that's how we got 50 plus songs in each show!! And when I wrote those
  shows I had never heard of Moxie!!
  
  Yes, I rather like the purple one, too!
  
  M-C