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[still life]













still life:
the sunflower bud
blossoms











A contest entry

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  • azure85 gold member
    September 22

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    Oh, Van Gogh would love your haiku, I am thinking of his painting right now. An excellent way to word the scene within the format of a haiku, thank you so much.


    • between slices
      September 23
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      thanks for the HM! appreciate it!!
      you know.. when you have writer's block.. haiku feel like the heavenly messengers of words and images. i don't have to bang my head and do odd moonlit rituals or the like to get the right string of words to express a specific feeling.
      it's just so.. simple.. yet so full.
      ^^,