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the thrills of believing a lie.




you're nothing extraordinary -- just so you know.
your eyes may deteriorate the multiple shades of green, and your toned muscles might be strong enough to climb a twelve-story building without gasping for air.

 

 

 

but that --

that doesn't make you extraordinary.

 

 

 

i.

 

we no longer talk.

we no longer share our sense of humor or interesting moments of our lives together, because apparently, silence between you and me is absolutely golden when it lands directly in the palm of your hand. it's not like i have anything extravagant buried away beneath my skin that would interest you anyway. and it's simply a matter of time before you become desolate, and i unravel the deepest meaning of bliss.

by this time, you suddenly will have decided to love me. 

 

 

 

ii.

 

i don't miss you.

it's completely inadequate to think i've possibly lost you, but your face only enters my lonely mind as an illusion when i close my eyes, and allow my thoughts to linger to everything i've left untouched. but i'd be naive to think you've separated yourself from me entirely; from the sensitive words you let drip from the corners of your lips.

 

 

you know,

 

 

 

the words that were almost sincere enough to mean something.

 

 

 

iii. 

 

it's pointless.

even if i were to pour my emotions down your throat, you still wouldn't comprehend what staggered throughout my bones and ignited my nerve-endings when you penetrated me with falsities. and though everything that i feel is indescribable, i have found clarity within the chances you haven't taken. 

 

 

we aren't an option;

we're simply a vulnerable form of desperation.

and within the boundaries of desperation,

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

love just doesn't exist. 

 

 

 

 

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yeaah, i haven't written in forever, it seems.
and i know this isn't that wonderful, but whatever.

[please] don't try so hard to say goodbye;

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  • she still smiles x gold member
    September 29

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    Hahaha ahhhhh, kudos to you and your brilliant talent! Ohemgee =D You are just pure genius with EVERYTHING that you write, didya know?

    So basically the very ending verse was my favorite parttt:

    iii. 

     

    it's pointless.

    even if i were to pour my emotions down your throat, you still wouldn't comprehend what staggered throughout my bones and ignited my nerve-endings when you penetrated me with falsities. and though everything that i feel is indescribable, i have found clarity within the chances you haven't taken. 

    Uhm, wow, SO MUCH TRUTH RIGHT THERE. I love this whole thing; it's just so intense and filled with such profound excruciating pain, how could it not tug at the reader's heart strings violently?

     

     

     

    we aren't an option;

    we're simply a vulnerable form of desperation.

    and within the boundaries of desperation,

    love just doesn't exist. 

    WOW hoe. You just said it all right there. There's nothing to say about those lines because, well, it's perfect :]

    loveyouuu♥

     

     


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    September 24

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    Your writings never cease to amaze me. This one is no exception. Your emotions are always raw and authentic, taking the teenage life and putting into onto "paper". The struggles, the pros and cons, the love/the hate - you make it all so real and vivid in your work. You have a great talent for that Amanda.

    Keep up the good work


  • Nuclear
    September 21
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    "we aren't an option;
    we're simply a vulnerable form of desperation. "

    Fuck yeah.
    This is indeed wonderful.


  • Candy Morphine
    September 21

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    oh dude. killer first line. i love the attitude. it yells and it screams superiorety.

    I SERIOUSLY LOVE THE BEGINNING OF THE (I) SECTION. i love it. i love it. it's so freaking enthralling.

    the ending. it's wonderful. it puts everything that is wonderful in language together and just hits you with this indescribable emotion.








    i missed this.


  • my.stars.dont.shine
    September 20

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    you may not have wrote anything in awhile but you sure havent lost any of your talent. this is stunning. and extremly relatable. im glad to read something from you again. but im sorry you are going through this.


  • fake-or-real-smile
    September 20

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    I LOOOOOOVE YOU! and 2nd most importantly, your writing!!

    This may not be one of your best writes, but it is still excellant. It seems like you've come to a conclusion in your head by the end of the poem which just adds that extra touch to it.

    "you're nothing extraordinary -- just so you know." - ha I fight the urge to tell the guy with me this!

    "we aren't an option;

    we're simply a vulnerable form of desperation."

    I love these bits!

    Sooo proud of ya for moving on

    XXXXX

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