On that blissful day we joined together
together we had became one
one to stand the hands of time
time to share in love's fun.
Still, on this day
day in which we joined together
together in wedding bliss
bliss short-handed, however.
We had no wedding song
song in which we danced to
to celebrate our union
union of both me and you.
No memories of a slow step
step as both man and wife
wife to the man of my dreams
dreams I had my whole life.
Yet, even though we didn't dance
dance didn't make the love
love we hold for one another
another wouldn't do, wouldn't think of.
Author notes
A unique form of writing I thought I'd try out...'Loop Poetry'
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Comments
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Neatly done...the last line lost me a little, but my mind added "it" .
I like this a lot, it makes me wanna try it. = )
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I like the rhythmical style. Cute and subtle effect. Last stanza has a bit of an enigma to it.
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well done..
this had a very bittersweet feel to it.. excellentlypenned my friend..
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