Encased by a vow of silence:
My itching heart wants more than this secret dream.
The flesh that surrounds my translucent body
Remembers the touch -
The gaze upon soft flesh -
As his mouth kissed the burning cheeks that sit upon my face.
Breathless -
As his hands trail my spine
And his arms wrap around my body.
A close, awkward silence,
As our bodies sit entwined with our breathless souls.
How many times do I have to let you burn my flesh with your lips?
How many more nights do I have to know you're not mine?
Longing -
The need to be called his as my fingertips trail the sweat falling down his spine,
And to feel one as our temples of love press against one another.
Hushed breaths and gasps of air,
Course gripping of pleasure,
The taste of Heaven that this secret brings can only sedate our clashing feelings.
"Be my secret lover," he whispered to me.
His words matched his touches,
As he grabbed a hold of my hand,
And put his spell on my body.
It's time to wake up from my ever-lasting dream.
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Author notes
This is a dream about an Ex...it's something I can't get out of my head, even if he and I did leave on bad terms. I hope you like it, I just had to get it the hell out of my head. Hopefully it'll stop haunting me now... x3
Tawni
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Just be as happy as you can ...
Love hurts, believe me I know, as I'm very old..hahah!...and sometimes you have to wait til your very old to find it... as I have.
God Bless...Lulu x
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God Bless and Angelsnot!!
Thank you so much for reading my poem and enjoying it. True, and sadly, its a fact of life - love hurts, but sometimes time heals, sometimes, it sticks forever. Thank you so much!
Angelsnot.
Tawni
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Im lovin it
GOOO Head I'm Really feeling this nice descriptions of the moment and the feeling that took place u made it sound current even tho it was old
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Thank you very much. I'm glad you liked my poem.
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And put his spell on my body.
A sweet, translucid poem. Enjoyed this last line.
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Very expressive.
My wife and I are old now and have great grandchildren. So the urgency of this kind of love is far removed from us. We are more like old friends than lovers.
This fact makes it difficult to evaluate your write.
The feelings of wishing to possess another and to be possessed are long gone.you
But I like your write!!!
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I hope you did get it out of your head.....
this is a beautiful piece entwined passion and hurt - a powerful concoction. I really liked your word... usage and you have a pretty powerful imagery too.... burning cheeks
Great Work .... all the best
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Thank you so much for reading my piece! It means a lot that someone likes my style, as well as my thoughts. Fantabulous comment, friend! ^.^
Tawni
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I like this a lot. I think we've all experience forbidden love in one form or another. I like all of it, but particularly the two lines between the bigger stanzas. The image of flesh being burnt by his lips is wonderful. Hope it helped to get it off your chest, isn't poetry just the best therapy :-)
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I'm glad you liked the two lines in the middle. I try to take a moment in my poem to explain thoughts, maybe questions of pain or confusion before continuing on. I appreciate your comment, thank you very much for taking your time to read it!
Tawni
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Well while your dreaming this your not having nightmares about something horrid, unless you class this as horrid....I think its lovely. One small alteration though...I had trouble reading the dark print on the dark background but I understand why you chose these colours...Dan
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Horrid Dreams:
There are times, when I have this dream, that I feel as if it's a nightmare - it almost haunts me. I love him, but, his memories hurt me sometimes. He really was my everything, but things happen. So, a beautiful dream can sometimes turn into a nightmare when you wake up to feel the hurt.
Thank you for your comment.
tawni
PS: Thank you for the tip on the colors.
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well, I can see why you like this piece! it is well written, and I can relate to a certain extent. it has an almost forbidden feel to it. great work on this piece!
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Forbidden love - indeed.
Thank you so much for your comment.
Tawni
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memories.....
great poem which takes the reader back with you to a time of extreme connecton and bliss - having found a great love and then it turning sour can take a lot to get over, but time and distance ease the pain (although the memories still remain)
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Back in Time:
Definitely - that's exactly the feel I wanted people to feel when they read my piece; forbidden, love, bliss, hurt, sour.
I'm glad you grasped the concept, and I'm very grateful you liked my piece. But even though its been months, I still feel the pain - I want him back, I love him - but it's not good. But hopefully, time will continue to heal - just like they all say. ^.^
Thank you so much for taking your time to read this.
Tawni
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Exceptional
Purging of the soul is a good thing, now you can put it behind you and go on with your life. Even in bad relationships there must be some good memories even if it is only the chemistry between the two.
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Good Memories:
We did have some very beautiful memories when it came to the chemistry between us, and I think that is what makes it hurt so much. The bad always out-weighed the good, but when it was good...it was good. Thank you so much for reading my poem and taking the time to comment.
And ever since I've written it, it has helped. Thank you for your wishes.
Tawni
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Excellent
Lost myself in it.
And yeah, Hopefully this will do the trick. I liked the last sentence. It's time to wake up from my ever-lasting dream."
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FantabulousComment
Thank you for reading! I'm glad you lost yourself in it, and I always try to do that with my poems - making the last sentence dramatic enough to end it.
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very well written, i really like it!
keep writing
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Thank you very much for reading!!
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