I feel this need for you
pulsing through my body,
reaching to the depths of my soul
My whole body needing your touch
Aching to take you in,
Anxious to cherish that moment in time,
A moment of innocence between us,
I am consumed with wanting,
to be held in your arms
hoping you will never let me go
A want to feel alive
A fire of lust lives within me,
aching, screaming,wanting desiring
Trying to claw its way out,
My body poisoned with its Passion
red hot fantasies of you and me,
together as two lovers should be
I'm intoxicated by your presence
my body has never hungered this much
The way you look at me
makes me desire you even more
Your glances pierce my heart
Your stares mend my soul
This lonely heart cries out for you,
begging to be captivated by your love
I'll get no rest until I can see myself in your arms,
a passion that remains ignited from hot fantasies of you and me
Please tell me what you think
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The Title
is the hotness and the write has no problem following...I'mma have slow my heart be down a little. It amazing how even in it's tastefulness it has a certain "raw" quality.
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Nice write...
You can feel the want here... Nice job.
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I'm waiting to share my passion with the right person. I have dozens of friends and 3 special friends. This poem is fantastic. Keep writing.
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this is a treat to read. i love the title and how you demonstrate it through the poem, capturing the longing emotion and sense of nothing else will do.
very nice.
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Smoldering and sensuous, I like the topic. I particularly like the line "Your stares mend my soul." This write expresses how captivating passion can be. The non-use of rhyme in most places worked well for me. I think some of the punctuation and capitalization could be made more consistent to give the piece greater consistency and more impact. However, the basic elements of what makes a good poem are already there.
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fantastic
this is a great read thanks for posting
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