The world always thought
You and I were “meant to be”
Even though we often fought
They said “someday you will see”
And somehow our sight has come
Or maybe I should speak for myself
Never knew I was so fucking dumb
Should have seen you were only into yourself
Now im crying because I don’t want you
and my heart is racing because it loves you
You’re not someone I would normally pursue
and im terrified of rejection too
Seems to me that the world was wrong
I’ve walked half way in hopes of being met
But maybe your 50% was much too long
So kiss my ass and watch my silhouette
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A contest entry
- Hating your ex? Hating your so called "friends"? Boyfriend Cheating on you? WHY NOT ENTER!!! MANY OPTIONS!!! by Shannon62875.
425 points, ended September 28, 31 entries
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haha, dayum, i liked the emotion in this, and the ending was the good kick that it needed, and it also helped show the angry side a lil more, great job and keep up the great work
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Thanks. I appreciate it.
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Hahaha...This is an awesome piece. I dig everything about it, content, rhyme[and variation ^5] and flow...but the ending just puts the cherry on top.
. Epic.
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Oh, this is a too familiar feeling. I loved the ending, sometimes leaving is the best thing.
Well done!
Nela
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wow i loved the last line very good flow and ryming awsome write good job
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Thank you. =]
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Wonderful. The contrast of love and hate, which always become entwined when the heart can not have its way with love. You described this perfectly. Great job. Good luck and thank you for sharing.
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EXACTLY
perfect combination of sadness and anger !!
feeling exactly the same way about a person that broke my heart
keep up the great writing
greetz
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Very Good
A very tortured person here wanting some one who doesn't want in return, can cause a lot of pain and broken hearts.
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very good...i can feel the hurt in this write.. keep up the great work and good luck in my contest!!!
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omg haha i LOVED this. it showed that u acknowledged the wrongs and rights and at the end of the day u decide to go the sensible way, the right way, which is a nice, satisfied way to end the poem. i also loved the rhyming, and the way u stuck to ur train of thought, and how all the words just flowed. ur brilliant!
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good
i like how you sowed it all together and still kept the emotion. good stuff!
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