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Desire

A deluge of sultry rain covered her body
She lay naked, uninhibited, completely satisfied
The droplets glistened like diamonds on her bronzed skin
...She was flawless

I wanted to drink from her again...   

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image is by....Thomas Doering


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  • DefinitiveFreak silver member
    October 1

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    I think this is flawless too. I agree with the contest holder, sometimes short and sweet is all that's needed.

    Thanks for commenting on my poem/song. I thought I'd return the favour.


  • JinSays gold member
    September 30

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    thank you. this is sweet and short and sometimes that's what's needed.
    I see some wonderful talent in this genre, for you. I hope you keep writing it just like this.
    love,
    jin


    • Gulfbreeze
      September 30
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      j i n

      Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments. I appreciate your taking the time


  • rrw gold member
    September 26

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    G, I think you did something very fantastic with this. Adult? Sure, but still is delicate and artistic... beautiful if  I may say so... just wonderful use of words to make it loving and not at all smutty. A great job... a real artistic flair.


    • Gulfbreeze
      September 26
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      rrw

      thank you so very much for this wonderful comment. It means so much.

  • Tercarro
    September 25

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    Throb, throb

    I'm sweating and dam well tempted to run amoke until something stops throbbing, it could be my head.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 22

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    uhm..

    uhm..UUUHHMMM...WOW WOW WOW!!!!
    "I wanted to drink from her again... " what a GREAT CLOSING!!! gulp!!! l.o.l.


    • Gulfbreeze
      September 22
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      thanks Swan for your approval, I grately appreciate your stopping by again.


  • Rick Weston silver member
    September 20

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    a moment well rendered in these few lines.

    beautifully done.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    September 20
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    mmmm..

    wow, very very ..uhm..heated.. loved the imagery, and the flow of this tantalizing piece of yummy!


    • Gulfbreeze
      September 20
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      Thank you Swan, you were my inspiration and i so appreciate it. It is short and sweet but to the point.


  • Michael
    September 20

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    Excellent job my friend. This is really a sensual poem that really does make an image within the mind. Very hot. Good luck in the contest.


  • melodytcromer
    September 19

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    WOW

    I must say it leaves you with no doubt about the event that took place I close mine eyes shame blushing. Ver good job nice write not to many words but then againg it says it all without a doubt>>>doesnt need any more words when it says it all so perfectly> Looks like a winner here good luck in the contest but luck has nothing to do with it your a pro so you know this is over the top and beyond ! mel. Good Job!

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