Is it so wrong to hate the things that brought joy in the past,
because the mere thought of them,
only brings on such a deep sinking feeling of despair,
that you fear at times , you can not go on ?
Wishing just to erase all memory,
all feeling from your being,
and just go through life as a numb shell?
Life I say...
I should have said existence.
For life has a way of being little more than a fleeting thought,
drowning in a sea of torment.
A flash that quickly spirals out of control,
and comes crashing to the floor,
shattering like an old windowpane in a worn-out condemned building,
doomed for the wrecking ball.
Time , ticking off the final moments of mortality,
slowly winding down,
dying out,
then becoming silent.
Like the screams in ones mind....
skull splitting,
yet unable to be given true voice.
Author notes
This is actually a prewrite but for some reason AP could not find it when I tried to enter it.
A contest entry
- Best Drug/Morbid Prewrites by XneverXgoodXenoughX.
1200 points, ended October 14, 93 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
When hope seems forever lost, how can it ever be recaptured?
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beautiful. very nice flow, i wrote a poem about addiction but not on here. its sounds very nice, good imagery.
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I like this, even though I don't read much dark poetry. The way you've written it though is beautiful. It gives me a sense of quiet even though the images are strong...dunno...The last lines are my favorite, which I think are extremely profound. The first line my least favorite because I can't seem to relate them to the rest of the piece..again, don't know why, and just my observations...This was like a sad instrumental. Much luck to you in the contest.
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Very well written, it speaks highly of the truth and I can feel what is felt in the poem. If there were not a title, anyone who is been at a time like this would know what it's about. Rock bottom would be a title I would give it if there was not one. Wishing to erase all memory is probably the line that I and most others would agree with. THanks for sharing. Write on, Read on, Rock on!!!!!!!!!!!!
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You have an interesting style that is well adapted to this piece. It reminds me of Dostoyevsky's Notes from Underground. You might be interested in checking out Thomas De Quincey's Confessions of an English Opium Eater, another classic.
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I really like this piece. It is subtle, but yet you can easily understand the meaning. So far, this is the best piece that ive read so far during the contest. You are a very possible finalist,
Amazing job, and good luck in my contest. Thanks so much for entering!!
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