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Birds


Pheasants of forgotten fields
chase rabbits through fresh snow-
morning mist floats on the bridge,
the 'keeper's whistle blows.



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  • sheltered
    September 23

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    I'd say this is for the birds
    but I'd be sorely mistaken

    each flier has agenda's
    with his own


  • Sandygram silver member
    September 22

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    Hello My Friend

    Hello Alex, What a beautiful poem. The imagery is lovely and fills the readers senses with only a few words. Excellent write and nice rhyme! Take care, Hugs and Smiles, Sandy .

  • Rowan gold member
    September 20

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    What a haunting vision this is... nice.


  • Venugopal gold member
    September 20
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    nice


  • knock
    September 19
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    knowing
    where you're blowing
    getting to where
    you should be going...


  • TheCSIgurl
    September 19
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    Ooooh! Great!

    Your images are fantastic, and your rhythm is flawless! I totally dig it.

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