We sat there, alcohol acted as a social lubricant.
Apply as needed.
I looked at you, we both knew that
if irritation occurs, we must discontinue immediately.
"Society has been harmed", I said
"Are you being prosecuted by the state?"
My answer impressed you
A joke works best when told in first person
We spoke of metaphors and syntax's
symbolism and capitalism
Kill the head-lights.
A contest entry
- Half an hour (contest) by just mercedes.
900 points, ended October 3, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
just praise the damn poem!
Comments
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hehehe, this was an exciting piece, i absolutely loved it, made me giggle
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Thank you for this entry into the contest. I like the format of your poem, the little 'bites' of information that don't quite string together into a picture, yet leave a lingering taste of disassociation, of arrows that sail past the target. I'm still puzzling about the final line - it closes the poem with a 'click' - but where are we now? Parked in an alley or out on a dirt road? About to come together, or part for ever? It's good not knowing.
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lol..I will praise it. I cannot explain right now what I read in this...I will come back to comment when I can think of a good one..I was intrigued from the beginning, and had to think about the surprising ending, but then got it, I think, and loved it. Wow, I read it again and still can't put my finger on it...but I like it alot. Awesome work.
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