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Greatful Rude Awakening

Corroded with tantalizing sensations -
Peering into the depth
Of something once, so aethereal
It was tangible, and so desireable
I ravished at the manifesting of it;

I leave.

Only to be be set free
By the epiphany, that
that was never me,
falling into those
tantalizing depths,
ravishing in the epitome
of someone else's desireable dream
becoming tangible by me succumbing.

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