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Neptune God of the Sea

NEPTUNE GOD OF THE SEA


Neptune the great god the seas
His power was great
He stop a storm it is tracks
Creator of horses
He delighted in























Allen Hollandsworth
©9/18/09

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Did for school time middle school history class

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  • crivanea silver member
    September 18

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    a few suggestions:

    Neptune the great god *of* the seas
    His power was *great - repetition of word..perhaps something else?
    He stop*s a storm *in* *its* tracks
    Creator of horses
    He delighted in


    myth wise..well done

  • Lady Dragonwyck
    September 18

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    Allen: the power and majesty of Neptune very vividly captured.

    Lady D