a tear falls
piercing
[a]
broken heart.
[rolling with cold emotion]
a tear shatters
slicing
chains.
A contest entry
- Shards of Diamond by VoltaicHypnosis.
650 points, ended October 5, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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Still like it, the simplicity is nice
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I really like this, mostly because, this is exactly how i feel right now. Like to a tee. Good entry, the title and poem give the whole meaning. The shattering display of pain, with the constriction of chains is imacculate to me.
look forward to more!!
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Interesting take... harsh, cold, bitter. Good.
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