The stars are fine embroidery
In midnight’s great untamed expanse:
Gold webs that tangle o’er the lea
Where an elusive zephyr chants
A spell of summer’s gossamer;
The stars are fine embroidery,
Crossing the vast where planets stir:
Huge galleons on a stellar sea;
Illumined there, quiescently,
All scattered there, strange pictures gleam;
The stars are fine embroidery
Between the dark horizons’ seams
Along the edge of earth – and all
Wait silenced in its fantasy;
Dim patterns of a coming fall,
The stars are fine embroidery.
~H.E.W.~
Author notes
a rewriting of a poem I wrote some weeks ago, which turned out not very good. . .the form is a quatern, which is French form, where the first line of the first stanza repeats as the second line of stanza two, the third of three, and so on; quaterns are always four stanzas, with eight syllables per line, and can have a variety of rhyme schemes, such as Aabb aAcc, etc.
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Astounding imagery and lovely vocabulary and rhyme scheme. Overall it drew me in and was an excellent write. Thank you for the entry
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Awesome
Quite cool to see someone using an official style, advanced and definately out of place amongst so many amateur poems =)
Without a doubt a great poem!
Joshua
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"which turned out not very good. ." Liar
It turned out very good. Thank you for taking the time to enter. Excellent work and I wish you the best of luck in my contest 
Heh, I've already commented on this poem I remember it from before
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First off... I haven't even read the poem yet and I'm impressed by the title.I was griping about people in one of my contests using the "abab" rhyme scheme today without a solid meter, and if it's o.k with you, I would like to use this as an example. Would you mind? Beautifully done. Not many people can pull it off anymore.
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would I mind?
nope, go ahead. I'm very pleased you want to use it. . . 
thanks for your encouraging comment, poet 
Elinor
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This whole poem was a dance of imagery....and I'm a sucker for detail!! I love it!!!
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I love the image of the stars as galleons crossing the great sea between the seams of the galaxy's horizons. A nicely done quatern.
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You have such a beautiful style of writing. I've only recently discovered forms in my own writing Tried writing an Italian Sonnet and it turned out surprisingly well in my opinion anyway great job on this one my friend
-Steve-
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Enthralling
Enchanting, entharalling, reads like a spell to lull the reader and send them to unguessed realms of fantasty. I loved it, absolutely loved it!!!
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thank you, thank you!
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