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Yea you could call it my naiveté

I thought, well,
it doesn't matter what I thought,
only what I think now.

But the trouble is,
I did think
that maybe,
I'd finally found a place to fit.

I'm so used to not having one,
and so now,
I guess now, I'm more...disappointed,
than anything else
In them
and in me for...
for once in my life,
being too easy to trust
I should thank them for the lesson,
that is if I ever speak to them again

But hey,
What's one more group of backstabbing bitches,
to add to all the ones I already deal with.

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  • camus gold member
    October 21

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    Hey Tal. I was so saddened to read in your poem of your treacherous "friends". The issue of broken trust is well conveyed in your almost vacant acceptance of their betrayal as is your underplayed response, the response of someone who seems to be used to treachery from friends. As you hinted in your poem, the lesson learned may be all you ever owe them. Good luck, Tal. Tony


    • evil-incarnate
      October 24
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      hey tony, thank you for your kind words. thankfully things have sorted themselves out and it was really a big misunderstanding. theyre still my girls, sisters really and i think theyre teaching me a bigger lesson, to trust in them. im still figuring it out and that was when this situation occured, but after a lot of explanation i guess im figuring out that they wouldnt betray me like that. i think ive found a permanent place to fit.


  • Fallen-Thumper
    September 18

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    hun thats unfair, you shouldnt have to go through with that, its cruel and not needed.
    your better than them anyday and well they are bitches, you dont deserve that.

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