As the pain closes in
and life draws to a standstill
twenty five years of memories
rush to the surface
first steps and grazed knees
report cards and broken hearts
the late night talks about
what matters in the world
those were the times we grew to know each other
Author notes
THE PIC IS YOUR PROMPT
TAKE IT WHERE YOU WILL
IN FIFTY WORDS
I chose to work with the words on the picture...in 50 words.
A contest entry
- ONCE by Swan song.
700 points, ended October 3, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I feel ....happy memories
I hear you ...love Do xxoo
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very deep and contemplative i can relate
first steps and grazed knees
report cards and broken hear
i liked these lines
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this has a serenity about it, it's like the poet is dying but accepts that this is what must happen for the world to go on. But is the poet 25 years old? I would expect a much older person to have written this.
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Thank you for the comment and yes, the writer is 55 but I wrote the poem about my 25 year old son who is dying. There is a certain serenity attached when you realise that the result is inevitable but it doesn't dull the pain it just brings a degree of acceptance unfortunately.
Margaret
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The song "Time in a bottle" comes to mind here Sis. Words will never be enough to dull your pain...love you
xxx
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Thank you sis
It's funny you mentioned that song Jules, it's a favourite of mine and lately I've been trying to put as many things as possible into that poor old bottle to the point where it's just about to burst
Love you honey
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*sigh* Simply beautiful dear.
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Thank you dear
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Know where you are coming from Twinny
Seems time takes it all and words can never compete...
hope I am wrong
Twinny
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I understand Twinny and you're right, nothing can compare with the love we hold for those close to us whether they have two feet or four
Love always darling
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Beautiful Margaret! This touches my heart. Having such a close relationship with my mother I can understand the "getting to know each other part".. so many don't have that kind of bond.
May the memories never fade...
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Thank you honey
We've always been close and I know that the memories will never fade because I won't let them...he'll always be looking after me and walking beside me no matter where he is. Even when he's in New Zealand having a drink or several with you my wonderful friend
I told him about that and he smiled 
Love always
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I can't wait!! I'll be there with bells on
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