I know a little girl,
I’ve known her for awhile.
She brightens up the bleakest days,
she makes her auntie smile.
I know a dedicated husband,
Who's loved you many years.
His caring hands and loving touch
Are meant to calm your fears.
I know a caring brother,
Who's been there all along.
His support has been abiding,
his hope can keep you strong.
I know a devoted mother,
A sister, niece, and friend.
I know a million helpful hands
On which you can depend.
And I know a certain feeling,
I’ve known it from the start.
It‘s the love we hold for you,
It comes from all our hearts.
Author notes
My Aunt Belinda means a lot to me. We are really close. She has always been there for me, and has always been there for my daughter Kai. She's been there for every butt rash, tooth to come through, every important event in Kai's life. My Aunt was diagnosed with Anaplastic Carcinoma of the Thyroid. They give her 8 months to live at most. This is the hardest thing I've ever had to deal with in my whole entire life. There is no beating this. I wrote this for my aunt, because we are having a benefit dinner for her tonight. I want to make this good as possible, and I know that the flow is a bit off. I also need help with the title. So if you could please help ASAP, that'd be nice. Thank you.
How do I make this better? CC welcome.
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Wow! Very nice
Nice tribute to your special aunt. I hope all turns out well for you all.
Wishing you all the best.
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deeply moving
what a beautiful and moving tribute to your aunt. hold on to hope and live every day with love. my heart goes out to you and your family (my daughter has cancer and I know how difficult it can be to get through the hard bits).
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This is really beautiful now, I like the changes made to this, you should feel very proud to read this wonderful heart felt piece of poerty. All the best to you and your family, may God Bless.
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This is a beautiful tribute.
I don't know if you have made the changes or not, I see some listed below. I think given the situation, this coming from your heart to your aunts, it will touch all hearts involved...greatly. These things happen everyday but when it touches someone we know...we notice. I pray your aunt belongs to Jesus. Things will just get better from here. For a christian, life on Earth is the worst we will have it. A also pray the Holy Spirit of Comfort rest on you. Write me. Loved the poem!
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My Deepest condolences to you and your family.This is certainly a tough time for all and I pray that peace and comfort guide you through. I took a look at your poem and i do have some suggestions for you. It is a loving, touching poem and I am sure will bring tears of pride to every eye. Here are my suggestions, i hope you find them helpful. Title is in (...) and suggestions or in CAPITAL LETTERS
(CARING HANDS AND LOVING HEARTS)
I know a little girl,
I’ve known her for awhile.
She brightens up the bleakest days,
(OMITTAnd) she makes her auntie smile.
I know a DEDICATED husband,
WHO’S LOVED HER MANY years.
His caring hands and loving touch
Are meant to calm her fears.
I know a CARING brother,
WHO’S BEEN HERE all along.
HIS support HAS BEEN ABIDING,
Although this road seems long.
I know a LOVING mother,
A sister, niece, AND friend.
AND YES SO MANY OTHERS
On which you can depend.
YOU know a certain feeling,
IT’SBEEN THERE from the start.
It‘s the love we hold for you,
It comes from CARING hearts.
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