Unconsciously, behind the door
in depths devoid of light,
lay festered thoughts which I abhor.
How darkly they incite.
Their strange perfume beguiles the mind
as they appear before eyes blind.
Their strange perfume.
Their strange perfume
releases darkness unconfined.
Unconsciously, behind the door
that each of us erects,
lies evil blackness that we store
from which the door protects.
Sonorous calls harshly transcend;
the heart can no longer defend.
Sonorous calls.
Sonorous calls
find voice within the poet's pen.
Unconsciously, behind the door
the demons in me grow.
Their whispered voices reach a roar
as knowledge they bestow.
Cascading ink and words implore
through images I can't ignore.
Cascading ink.
Cascading ink
congeals upon a paper shore.
Author notes
This is a fun form... I hope you enjoy it.
Form: Trijan Refrain created by Jan Turner, consists of three 9-line stanzas, for a total of 27 lines. Line 1 is the same in all three stanzas. The first four syllables of line 5 in each stanza are repeated as the double-refrain for lines 7 and 8. The Trijan Refrain is a rhyming poem with a set meter and rhyme scheme as follows:
Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c
Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/(refrain)4/4/8
A contest entry
- Inside the mind of a poet by Spiritual Soul.
1200 points, ended September 29, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critical Comments Always Welcome
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I like your take on the prompt...not all thoughts are beautiful, some are dark.
I also like the form you have used, maybe I'll try it sometime.
A wonderful write, I enjoyed the read.
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How on earth did I miss this the first time around? Love the form and your words most definitely capture the poetic spirit.
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This is one of my favourite forms to read! It has a lyrical feel almost and works for all different genres. Darkly seeping penning here! Sounds a lot like my own process to writing.
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YES!
this is a good write i like the way you put words to the thought that dark
thoughts have a perfume, i think the perfume should be an actual smell though like hard whiskey and cinnamon but none the less i like thi poem for what it is while i was reading i couldnt help but think instead of writing cascading ink, like ink through blotting paper
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ooh I really like this!! very creative and expressive.Interesting form, I've never heard of it, thanks for showing me a new form, and your beautiful entry!
Blessings,
~Michaela~ -
Very spooky and lilting. Great rhythm. It's very true that we all have those little doors in our minds that we shove all the bad stuff behind. The figurative 'skeletons' in our figurative 'closets'. I did indeed enjoy this very much. Great write!
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Now this is definetely one dark poem. the imagery alone can send shivers down one's body. WOW! I see this another form that I'm just going to have to add to my growing list of forms to try. at this rate I'm going to buried beneath forms..lol excellent job with this poem.
Good luck
Kat
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