The air outside is deafening
each raindrop screams my name.
I lay quite still considering
that I alone may know this moment,
lost in time
tonight.
A contest entry
- six lines. by sighingflosser..
700 points, ended September 28, 50 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? Any good?
Comments
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this starts well with the screaming rain, then "that i alone may know this moment" - very nice scene captured.
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