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Love Never Forgotten

The beautiful stars in the sky they shine
Like your soul which is oh so divine
You will forever mean the world to me
I hope in the end we were meant to be

Into your eyes I could stare and lose myself
Upon a pedestal you rest on my heart's shelf
You mean the world to me this will always remain true
For I would never be the one to hurt you

When it storms it erases my anger with calming rain
With you by my side, gone is any of my disdain
A hug or a kiss from you make me blush
To see you mad, is to see you sadly flush

Forever and always will you be my friend
This will be until death's tragic end
Take care of my heart for I've left it with you
Please don't make me feel like a fool for caring for you

I know who you are inside as well as out
You're someone to my friends I'd brag about
I won't forget you when you have to leave
As long as we meet again, one hollow's eve

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  • bunnyslasher157
    October 31, 2009

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    That's so sweet. I like It. Good luck and keep writing!!


  • MelissaluvzSheila gold member
    October 13, 2009
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    I remember reading this & commenting on this. This was good. Keep up the amazing work. Thanks for entering and best of luck too you in the contest!


  • Thewordflow
    October 12, 2009

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    I prefer the ending of this to the beginning but its a really good write

    Not quite so sure about this line though,
    'Please don't make me feel like a fool for caring for you'
    It sounds a bit of a mouth full

    Just a tip :L

    Good luck and thankyou for entering


  • GinryuStargazer
    September 27, 2009
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    Hmm...

    The beginning seemed a bit cliche`, but the originality of love came back later. The rhymiung was not forced, kudos for that!


  • sweet fresh love
    September 17, 2009
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    l love this poem it remain me my soul mate


  • MelissaluvzSheila gold member
    September 17, 2009

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    This was really good and very well written. I enjoyed it. This was nicely written. I liked the way this flowed. Thanks so much for entering an best of luck to you in the contest...

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