I must write a poem
As the train drifts in the dark
And a melody echoes in my ears
When the wind hits my face
It’s the night and I sit by the window
Watching the flickering city lights
As we rush past them
While the crowd sleeps
Predators must be rolling in these tunnels
And bats must be swooping low
The trees seem to whistle
And stretch their limbs a bit
A peculiar scent that floats in the air
Fills my nostrils, cold at the edges
And dew melts on my fingers
When I hold the window’s iron bars
I watch, as we move on
Trying to look hard through the darkness
Searching for an unusual twitch
That can make me shiver inside
Electricity poles stand alert,
Beside the stretches of mustard and wheat
Sleeping beneath the night’s robe
But still, known to me
Sky is dark and the moon hangs
Staring at the hills, from behind the clouds
As the whistle blows from the engine’s end
Perhaps to say, go away, go away…
18th September 09
-Neha
Author notes
I love travelling in the train at night. Recently I read Ruskin Bond's 'The Tunnel'. This non rhyme has been inspired from it. I wrote it without much thinking. Its the true effect of the wonderful short story on me. I loved it!
-Neha
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wonderful poem....erupted straight from the resonating sounds of train...i really enjoyed it...all the best..
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very nice very nice
I so much enjoyed it. It almost was actual...real...or whatever you say...
You are a serious poet....I mean sincere poet.....I feel very nice that I went through your work. I am going to read more of your work in a day or two.
May God bless you!!
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Thanks a lot for your lovely comment!
-Neha
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Great!
I loved the poem. It's on a subject that I haven't come across often, but you wrote it perfectly. Actually makes me want to take a trip like that as well.
Thanks for sharing!
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the flow of words seem to synchronise with ur train journey, very well written
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This was great! I really loved the flow of this poem... it just seemed to draw my eyes down the page. Makes me want to read that short story! Congrats on a great write, and thanks for sharing!
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Amazing Poem!!!
Wow Neha, this was a wonderful poem. Your imagery had me on the train feeling every emotion. You did Ruskin"s word justice in your inspiration.
Hugs and Smiles to you.
Peace and Grace,
Sandy
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