There's a sadness in her face
When she thinks no one is looking
Hardly a smile passes her lips
Whenever she's all alone
Her mind wanders to thoughts of him
Unbidden and unwanted when she hears that song
And her heart cracks a little bit more
When she hears that he's with someone new
Her love is somewhat damaged
But she's trying to heal everyday
Trying to get over the pain of losing him
And its the hardest thing she's had to do
Wondering if he was really her's to begin with
She put too much trust in him
Lost her heart and lost her dreams
Gave them all to a boy
Who thought he was man enough to hold them
This is a first draft...constructive critizism please...
Comments
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i like thiz rlly i do no lie at all, I always see ppl do that sayin one thing and changein it. But bravo writer if i cld applaud more I wld!
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Wow beautifully expressed and written! You have hit the nail on the head with this write, it seems this is a common theme amongst love now days. It takes a talented writer to be able to touch on this subject with such depth. Great job!
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