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playful scar..

Wound re-opened..

Yet I enjoy that pain

Even when I thought the last drop of love

Had been slain


So torture me then

Show me your tease

Bring about intensity

Reduce me to my knees


I can take it

For my will is still strong

Tear through this flesh of mine

For it has been much too long


I need to see them

Those playful eyes

That stir my very essence

And my blood pressure to rise


Bring back that pain

For now let me have it

Then remind me what you did to me

AND I WILL DROP YOU LIKE HABIT

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  • Jalalbad gold member
    October 16
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    I LIKE THE I WILL DROP YOU LIKE A HABIT. THE DROPPINGS OF A PIGION OR WORDS OF A FOOL WOULD BE A NICE ENDING TO THIS POEM


  • Aalta silver member
    October 10

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    as I started reading this... I was like... hey this is creepy. why would someone enjoy a wound... pain ... but as the emotions begin tro unfurl later It took me in
    and I specially liked the last verse. but again habits can hardly be dropped:

    I think I did enjoy it very much

    thank you for sharing it


  • Angelo di Luce gold member
    October 8

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    Habits are hard to get rid off dear friend, may be you should say rabbit

    I think you should try to write serious poetry, so we can see what you can do, instead of writing school kids staff

    This kind of thing is not going to get you far, it is just like soft porn and most of us here like hardcore, so to speak

    I shall give you two claps to get you going


    • Jalalbad gold member
      October 16
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      YOU LIKE HARD PORN EH? HOW ABOUT A HARD SLAP IN THE FACE???

    • moderndayvampire
      October 9
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      i started to read this and take slight offense to your comment-however after digesting it for a moment or two i'm not sure if actually to take it as a compliment...
      Bare in mind please Angelo that i dont often have time to get on here and in fact most commonly when i am on my lunch break at work.
      I will see what i can do to meet your standards, i'm not shy of a challange.
      thank you for you time


  • XxTigerxX
    October 7
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    WOW! that was really good!!! GREAT JOB!!!


  • XxApatheticAngelxX
    September 19
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    Jamie this is amazing!!! I have missed you!!! pm me sometime


  • Girl-Interrupted gold member
    September 17
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    oh jamie! such emotion in this piece..! powerful ..
    AND I WILL DROP YOU LIKE HABIT <----wow factor!
    snuggles...


  • lovemedeath
    September 17
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    wow.... power emotion!! love it!!

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