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flowers

 


spring tangled with the breath
                   of an open door


and she painted daisies
over her irises

then expected him not to notice
diamonds were missing
                   from her eyes
and her smile


he smothered summer over
    her embrace

                       and plucked
the purest bouquet
from her gaze
   before she had chance to
   crush his fingertips

and as the onset of autumn
closed the door
            with russet flavours

he promised

                   to shelter her

from the harshest season


until her laugh echoed
with seeds of lavender
                                 and rose

 

 

 

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  • MissingBatteries
    September 18

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    This piece was nothing short of stunning; I'm not entirely sure, but I think you just planted a garden in my mind. Wonderfully written; you have such a pretty way with words. Thank you for sharing!


  • sweet arrival gold member
    September 17

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    you have combined the perfect flowers for this piece. i love your imagery and of course how you write with everyday items and turn them into something extraordinary.


  • chilali
    September 17

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    simply stunning amazing choice of words and gorgeous imagery! lovely feel throughout the poem! thanks for sharing. you're incredible