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You’re Already Halfway There

Like an unwritten poem our lost thoughts become confusing, refusing to believe what is real still we feel amused by those unfulfilled dreams too time consuming.

Unwinding in this universe, sometimes wishing we could stop and reverse our choices that hurt, to be able to breathe without tears dripping down the sleeve of our souls. Screaming to our shadows how nobody knows.

When will we see, or how will we know, no one has the answers to set what we need free and let the unanswered questions go.

Boundless energy surrounds us endlessly, patience awaits for us even when we are late. Resisting persistence leaves us distant, remaining far from where we came.

We’ve already started living, giving all that we have, we disappear in our sorrows hoping someone’s there to take our hand, still our blind thoughts demand that we are alone, how could anyone understand.

Without prayer, brings despair, without hope we cannot cope. Forgetting history, our lives drowning into a mystery.

A mistake can break us into tiny pieces, paralyzing the joy of our own creations, misplaced in the time we seem to take to hear but not listen.

Visions we see but can’t touch. We see the rain coming though to feel it inside is unreal. If your soul is crying love remains the cure to heal.

We have no one to blame, shame taking over all that we believe, so receive the invitation to the unlimited population. Where we all  feel the same, for the one who is always calling our name.

Take a step forward, stop standing still, until your lifted off your feet by the defeat of the battle within, as it spins into a spiral becoming viral.

There’s always an end, to pretend there’s not will lead us falling, calling out again, waiting and draining as your fears come raining down your face, replacing the hopes that it takes to retrace.

Memories of what we once had, sad by a loss and wanting more then we have. Not realizing what we need is already there, yet we are told that life is unfair.

Give it all to the one that brought us here, fear not as the dark clouds cover our minds, read the signs, go through the open doors when it begins to pour, and enjoy an endless love forever more

Take what you give, doesn’t always mean give back what you receive, we deceive only ourselves becoming ashamed and unpleased.

Our imagination can be used to take us to beyond our determined destination frustration can lead us off our path to a wrath of the unknown leaving us feeling all alone.

Love more than you are loved, give more then you have, be thankful and grateful, say sorry, don’t get mad. Forgive yourself and others, when you’re happy or when you’re sad, say a prayer and wait be patient… your already halfway there.



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  • I really liked this, especially the line about giving it all to the One Who brought us here.

    He is our hope in our hopelessness.Great thoughts!

  • emma7386
    September 25

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    this was a truly wonderful read, i do agree that perhaps the rhyming at times doesn't feel as powerful as it could, but perhaps it wouldn't be as good without it? it's hard to know as the poem speaks volumes and truly touches on so many things, thank you


  • foreheadofgod
    September 24

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    i really needed something like this right now. its very uplifting and helps me to see beyond myself.....as i have been selfish and kind of a jerk to the only people who care about me lately.


  • Wyakin
    September 22

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    This was a very, touching poem. It didn't speak just to me, but it speaks to all who view this. This was Wonderful, and beautiful. Keep on writing, and good luck in this contest.
    Wyakin


  • stef-witt gold member
    September 21

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    Firstly, I wanted to commend you on what is reads as a very enlightened poem. You've touched on some thoughts and emotions here that a lot of people could relate to and understand. Kudos for that!

    To offer some critique - I'm not sure about the rhyme that you're using in some parts of this piece. I feel like you could have said more and gotten your point across better if you hadn't limited yourself to using rhyme. But having said that, perhaps that rhyme would have assisted the flow of the piece if the fomatting had been different. I don't know.

    But at the end of the day, the formatting and use of rhyme is up to you, and regardless of whether I thought it worked, this is a very strong piece with wonderful insight. Well done, and thanks for sharing!

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