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first kiss

We were two
mouths, two humans
separate souls

Your breath, heavy
inhaled the thin

line of air
dividing us,
spilled between my lips,
lingered

like red wine

 

As if you were the sun

warming

a faint autumn breaze

your heat
flushed my skin

 

Your scent gently

engulfed me, became my own

 

Now
your taste

is all through me

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  • Endeavor gold member
    October 23

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    Excellent

    Your scent gently
    engulfed me, became my own

    Now
    your taste
    is all through me

    I could have quoted the entire verse
    I love the opening words to this
    Wonderful writing

    Rick


    • michellemybelle gold member
      October 23
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      Thanks Rick. I actually want to play withthis verse a bit, smooth it out. I appreciate you reading and the applause!

      Michelle


  • melphleg gold member
    September 30

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    Very sensual, dear. I love how you incorporate all the senses. Congratulations on the silver. Well deserved. My only question is when am I going to enjoy what you so well described?


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    September 28
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    Oh.. this is just divine!! Beautifully penned with just the right touch of heat. Love it!


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 21

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    Congrats Michelle.


  • shiratikva
    September 21

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    Very sensual...
    Congratulations for the Silver!


  • jazzcat gold member
    September 21
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    Congrats on the Silver!


  • Pure Thought silver member
    September 20

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    Well Hi Michelle

    This is so sensual!!! I think the first kiss is the most delicious. Wonderfully warming imagery.

    Buddy


    • michellemybelle gold member
      September 21
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      Thank you Buddy. It's been a while since I had a first kiss, but I know, it's the most remebered!


  • JinSays gold member
    September 19

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    ohyes, this is just lovely. thank you.
    love,
    jin

    • michellemybelle gold member
      September 21

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      Thank you very much for the silver, I am honored!

      • JinSays gold member
        September 22
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        it would have been gold, had I more than one to give.
        congratulations, darling

  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    September 17
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    Oh yeah, loved that end.

    Nice.

    All the best,
    mj.


  • AbundantBetrayals
    September 17

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    this was so sweet and perfect; capturing emotion with action well doen and good luck in the contest!
    ~Betrayals


  • jazzcat gold member
    September 17

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    You know...I have been trying for so long to write and really capture that moment of a first kiss...and now I read that you just nailed what I have been trying to put to paper for years. Bravo! Beautiful, romantic, tender, exciting...wonderful. Good luck in the contest.


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    September 17

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    Oh what sweet memories this brings me! I find myself drifting back in time...~sigh~

    Seems a life-time ago and only yesterday. This is just lovely Sis...

    Love you~

    Sue


    • michellemybelle gold member
      September 21
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      Thanks Sis, yes sweet memories from a long time ago! Glad I could remember. lol
      love ya


  • HystericalHeart
    September 17

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    Hm. The most interesting part about this write is that It made me think so much more happened in the lock of the kiss. Secrets between the lips. I liked it. Good luck in the contest. ^^

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