Let's pretend for a moment you mean something to me
When really you're a fucking stain on the wall of history
Nobody really knows that reality is just the chance to take
The choice to make
You've chosen to go along your path, and I've chosen mine
We now see we were wrong, we are not to always intertwine
Thoughts so cruel, throughtout this past year has been
But nothing compared to not seeing that grin
You were my best friend for the most of seven years
We were always alone, surrounded by our peers
Best friends forever is what we always said
But you tore out my heart and left me for dead
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Good start
well, I like it so far, it might just be me but 'the consequences to take' doesn't seem right...would 'you've chosen to go Alone along your path' work better...I like that 'We were always alone, surrounded by Our peers'...
like I said I like it, and its a great start for a poem, I upper-cased the words I thought might work...
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Thank you!
And yay me for forgetting the "our" in "our peers"!
But that's pretty typical for me!
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