So disjointed,
anamnesis is always the first to yield.
The present dispersed amidst fading yesterdays
as tomorrow becomes today
and all I know is lost to dreams,
quelled before the inquisitor
of perception’s vacillation.
I walk amidst fragmented thoughts,
a fractured man in a broken mind,
a stranger in my psyche,
building walls of self deception,
staving a path twixt Angels and Demons,
tainted in the purgatory of my soul,
torn between the darkness and the light
yet bound to intuition I cannot trust.
For what is reality?
If not but an assumption of the many,
bestowed by the few, conceived by the one
who sees beyond the veneer
of discerned corporeality?
Delving deeper beyond the veil,
lost to chimeras that hold revelations
and falsehoods in equal abundance.
A gift that keeps giving yet becomes its own curse....
...Caveo appositus obscurum...
Author notes
Prompt: "Spiritual Subluxation"
Pic from http://th04.deviantart.net/fs27/300W/i/2008/148/e/0/Angels_Vs_Demons_by_carlostattoo.jpg
A contest entry
- Spiritual Prompt/Dark Ink Spilled, Please by liquidmindforever.
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Subluxed and Cankered
I walk amidst fragmented thoughts,
a fractured man in a broken mind,
a stranger in my psyche,
Dear Poet,
Thank you so much for entering my contest:"Spiritual Subluxation," with your submission
"Twixt Angels and Demons."
anamnesis is so clever of you with your double entendre of recalling and patient history.
yah.
reality?
... an assumption of the many,
dark and beautiful in the realms of unreal phenomenon
...Caveo appositus obscurum...
me thinks it's a bit late in the day darlin'; but, hope springs...
wishing you the best
till then
welcome to the finalists
stay
liquid
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a good read
i liked reading this its truly a voyage through the darkside -
A wonderful psychological labyrinth. Very complex and thoughtful. Love it
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A man who knows just how to pick a last line...
Awesome dude, that last line would have made the entire poem. For me closing with a bang sometimes means everything and once again you did it!
Excellent piece of poetry as I have grown accustomed to read from your imagination filled pen.
awannabepoet
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I absolutely love to pop in to your page! I am never disappointed! I loved all of this, but the second stanza, God, the imagery, the thoughts it provoked ..... well, that's talent; that's what it's all about. You are really an amazing writer. I hope you are not hiding all of it here at AP. Your writings are something everyone should get to read!
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Oh my bro
the imagery in this was so strong i felt as though i was falling with every word read.
dark words filled my head
keep the ink flowing
fire
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You are a master in word art, no one can get close to your pictorial descriptions of roads through the mind and personal thought. You really need to make your talent for this type of dark writing available to everyone and anyone with their own personal demons to understand. You could give them hope and clarity.
Sheila
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Just remarkeable as always dear
I don't know why biut this made me smile in a way
It's a bit liike I feel so often
As if you could look ionside of me sometimes
Just fantastic there is nothing I can say bout that else because no words can describe that
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A very profound piece of work!!! A deep journey into the inner psyche. Chillingly dark with a touch of crystal clarity in thought and reason. Love this!!!! BRAVA!!!
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I tell you.. your writes always twist my mind a little!! But in a good way of course
You have such a unique style you know, unlike any other here. It's captivating in it's darkness.
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been meaning to read more of your work
and I am glad that this is the one I stumbled upon. Beautifully macabre and masterfully executed. Your brevity and wit have taken center stage in this very relatable piece. Best to you in your competition.
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great
well done for this write
dude this is awesome
great word choice as always
keep up the good work dude
love jayde
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Excellent as always
flow and word play
outstanding
well done!!
Thanks for the share
Darky
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wow this is a deep piece very thought provoking my dear big brother!!!! This is full of thought and heart and soul!!!!!!! Your words are deep and dark!!!! This is incredible I can't even describe how well written this is!!!! You did an amazing job!!!!! I love it!!!!!! I LOVE U LOTS!!!!!!!!!
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Awesome write
and one I can relate too
I love your word choices
and I'd pick a fav line if
I could find one, but they're all perfect!
Great job!
Thanks for sharing
and best wishes in the contest!
~Pastel
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