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Dressed in black,
with skin of gold,
a shining halo,
your tortured soul.

I see no demons,
within your bright eyes,
then the way you shut down,
comes with such a surprise.

I see no emotion,
in the set of your face,
in the way of your posture,
you have so much grace.

But your hands are so shaky,
as you pull out your blade,
i see that your scared now,
but your calm does not fade.

You dispatch of the monsters,
two at a time,
your seraph blade shining,
you look so sublime.

When the fights over,
you lay down your arms,
as you walk to me,
letting go of your calm.

I see all the pain now,
your eyes have gone black,
you've come a lot closer,
you look taken aback.

I want to pull you toward me,
to embrace you real tight,
to make the pain go away,
so you can sleep well tonight.

You walk right on past me,
don't look me in the eye,
and the love that i feel for you,
makes me want to break down and cry.

I wouldn't think you felt the same,
you don't really show it,
but i can see inside you,
and i feel it and i know it.

Author notes

Basically my inspiration came from The Mortal Instruments trilogy my Cassandra Clare.
I love those books so very much, the best books i've ever read by far.
I just had a strong compulsion to write a poem about Jace from Clary's point of view.
Some people on here may have read the books in which case they'll know what i'm on about.

So here's what i'm asking of you
I need a title for this poem and i just can't think of one.
Whoever comes up with a title for this poem for me i will add as a favourite.

Thank you very much.
Kayyleighxo

The Mortal Instruments

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  • xeroabyss II
    September 17

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    You would be surprised at how I can relate this to an exact specific point in my existance.
    Wanting to be strong, be a warrior to walk the path along side with another...
    Tis quite a good write, in its sad, unwantedness of love.
    Sucks to be an inferior shadow in the light of perfection.


  • CyanideCandy
    September 16

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    I really like this,
    The image that I get when reading it is clear and I like it!