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Out of Kilter

Ectopia Lentis for the poet seems

less rare than nurse’s elbow - malady

affecting insight, nervous links to dreams

felled flat when facing life’s fatuity,

synapses gridlocked by most mundane schemes.

 

Nun's vows of silence often may be seen

as experience's triumph over hope,

when prayers unanswered lie, lies in between

hope's evanescent sparks too little scope

retain before snuffed candle's choked smokescreen.

 

Though castle proud stands o’er uncrowded bay

it stays Time's hostage, can’t stay earthquake strikes,

or climate change, sea levels havoc play

submerging value judgements, likes, dislikes,

for even vestal prim must piper pay.

 

Where words vocation plead, breed not blead rant,

need heed no trite event to vent despair,

forbear from prose dressed as verse rose, spurn cant,

'neath superficial polished stone compare

true motivations, self-esteem too scant.

 

Blind minds behind their superfluity

find ingenuity may tables turn

vice into virtue, incongruity

or role-reversal often praise may earn –

which suits both ‘giver’, ‘given’ to a T.   

 

Artistic talent which would self anoint

through sad fad trends that end before dusk falls,

is seldom selfless, often out of joint

with harmony fair, free, spends core, husk shawls,

vacuity still_born to disappoint.

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Time’s hungry waves transform dark rocks, light g[r]ains

of untraced triumphs heedless race, vain pains ...

Author notes

robi3_1923_robi3_0000 XXX_EIX


http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Subluxation

  Ectopia Lentis – floating lens
nurse’s elbow : radius subluxation from annular ligament

 

 

Image NC  ... décallages des calines - deux collines 

retro action réaction : traction contraction retractation

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  • sinfull
    September 16

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    With mind define allude conclude ink spent
    One history replayed conveyed still bent

    excellent pen


  • Night Hope gold member
    September 16

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    As always, my Friend, your words and patterns of thought placements cause one to ponder long in reckoning, to contemplate the vast horizons of discernment you so easily seem to display. Impressive as always, Scribe. Well done.



  • liquidmindforever gold member
    September 16

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    Dear Poet,

    Thanking you very much for your entry "Out of Kilter" into my contest
    "Spiritual Subluxation."

    Before reading further into and in between the muscle and tissue of your
    in depth tasking on this prompt, which i admire and appreciate, please
    be advised that your line length exceeds the 29 line maximum of the contest
    rules.

    There is more than ample time for you to edit this piece of work and re-submit
    for finalist placement.

    If and i certainly hope you choose to edit, please im with title and contest name
    as i have 4 running at this time; it will surely make my job easier.

    till then
    wishing you the best
    and
    stay
    liquid
    love the picture and where you allowed this prompt to wend within your
    grey matter.