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Hadean Eclipse

Drink from the wounds of Bleeding Chirst
This kingdom shall drown in madness
Hades will rise to rule again
And rain will wash away the lies
Death shall eclipse the hateful sun
For Darkness, will be our bride...

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I've gone with more of a black metal apporach with piece. To as whether this will be my new style of writing, I'm not sure.

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • RenyJameel
    October 16
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    wahooo

    dark one ...nice


  • C.I.M.A Punk
    September 17

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    It sounds like Marduk - Darkness It Shall Be, only way shorter.
    It can become your new style since you're doing a nice job.
    Elaborate more and it can be even better.

    Nice job!

    • No More Lies
      September 18
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      Thanks - I was on the train to college when I wrote this and I didn't want to make it too long incase I ruined the whole thing
      I'll have to have a listen to 'Darkness It Shall Be'


  • Nuclear
    September 16

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    I wouldn't stick with this as your only style of writing. There isn't much else you could do with it, except maybe elaborate a tad bit more.

    • No More Lies
      September 16
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      I've just been in a blackened mood lately. All my ideas seem to to be dark, Gothic or just plain misanthropic/hateful :/

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