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Bright eyes scream suicide

the smile on your face defies
singing melodic lullabies
please God tell me this is a lie
bright blue eyes scream suicide

tell me where your conscience falls
the place where standing hope now crawls
lost deep inside these haunted walls
to bright blue eyes a razor calls

somewhere confiding deep within
there is a heart of golden sin
lest you somehow let it win
those bright blue eyes won't give in

Trust me love...They won't give in.

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  • myusikah
    September 26

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    Wow. You're still really dark, but I realize that your poetry has gotten better in imagery~

    I think it's about a loss of a friend who killed herself. Maybe you were in love with her, maybe not. maybe she hasn't done it yet, and you're pleading with her to not go through with it.

    It's really beautiful.

    -->pia♫♪


  • spideracer gold member
    September 16

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    Lets see, I'd say it is about a lost soul reaching out to their god, crying for help while bleeding their heart dry. You have some strong imagery here, emotions of pain that the soul is fighting against. Well done, take care.


  • Denerica
    September 16

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    Wow...a wonderful cry out and even for the one you want to save from this wretched evil trick that tries to befall our brethren. Awesome write. Blessings.