hear the rain
let's stay in bed,
warm in our sanctuary
where we
neither begin or end
our breath
is one
wrap our limbs
bodies shutter
as our souls embrace
and dance effortlessly
to our ritual's song
but first Love,
let's play
in the rain
I want to fall
in love with you
again
A contest entry
- its a shame to waste the rain....give me 50 by Princess Derge.
400 points, ended November 22, 36 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is really sweet...its calming somehow.
nice write :] -
there is something about raining mornings, the patter on the roof and windows, lulling us back into our love's arms. lovely work.
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Hi Girl
Just reading again
Rick -
Sis how did I miss this? I love it. So reminiscent of times when love was innocent and free. When playing in the rain was as wonderful as an evening in Paris! {maybe even better!}
Blessed be lovely soul...this was a blessing to me this day!
Love you Sister!
Sue
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believe it or not, John and I did just this the other day.
We both had off and it rained all day long, so we stayed
in bed all day and had lots of fun doing so... now I just told
all of FB way too much info. LoL
Love your poem, my friend it's so sweet, boy do I love the rain.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Love Ya,
Joyce
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Yes, tantalizingly fresh
Great write that only can come from those tinkled moments where rain drops out shine the sun.... Where lost in the moment needs to be re-invented time and time again!
Best wishes, great write!
bjarne
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Hmmmmmm, This is fantastic! I love playing in the rain, (and out of it
) There is something about the rain.... Great job!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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Excellent
wrap our limbs
bodies shutter
as our souls embrace
and dance effortlessly
to our ritual's song
I can almost here the rain
a lovely write
Your gifts show well
$Rick
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The ending was the perfect punctuation for this piece. The rain is so romantic and your images really heighten that romantic feel. To play in the rain, as adults, to be uninhibited and free to enjoy the bad weather and fall in love all over again...wow, you really nailed this one!
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