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learning from lori




today, I did not let the world bulge
in the pit of my stomach to fester

I allowed myself to float
ambivalent, carefree

I did not let every red light pull
at my rush to go nowhere
but, slowed

to witness a million souls pass

and at the punch clock this morning
with mary and mary
huddled around that which we knew

was inevitable

we shed our silent tears
thought of the two little boys
now motherless

and the fight of a woman
we could only stand back
and admire




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in memory of Lori, and her 5 year battle with cancer.

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  • ccawley gold member
    November 4
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    Your voice is tender and clear.


  • JinSays gold member
    October 19
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    I'm so sorry Jersene.

    love,

    jin


  • transcendental baby gold member
    September 16
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    This is lovely!


  • Nicolette gold member
    September 16

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    beautiful and tender... such a soft voice here, Jersene



    ~ Nicolette


  • arafura gold member
    September 16
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    Very powerful and emotional.


  • tara wilson gold member
    September 15
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  • charcoal
    September 15

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    love the opening lines

    and love your soft voice, once again. i moved through this poem in slow motion.

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