The water, calm as a sleeping lion,
With the wisdom of this clawed beast,
Reflects what opaque eyes daren’t show.
Like stained-glass, they poorly mirror
The depths of a tide-pool soul:
Murky, with its deepest layers stirred.
The wind ushers an unconscious sin,
Whispering with intentional innocence,
It ripples through the glassy liquid,
Making livid creatures of slumber.
Tempests and sirens of fear-born lore
Are dragged from storybooks with his breath.
And upon him is a seaman’s death;
He who dared rouse the feline,
Fell into his own image, trapped
Inside the very man he begged not to be.
Imprisoned in all that he made himself.
He’s drowning; he keeps breathing.
The water is calm, the wind still.
The chaos lies in what the depths hide.
Author notes
I was inspired by a part of Macbeth we read in Literature class. 
Most of this was wrote in school, 'cept the last line. ^-^
Purple!
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Ahh... how I wish I could have your talent. You never try to rhyme. You never seem to try with your work at all. It all just seems so fluent, so from the soul, so to speak. I wish I could do this. I envy you and all of your works.... This piece was great. Unfortunately I never read Macbeth, so I was lost in this piece.....
BUT, as I told you, you'd be my 1,401th comment!
Congrats 
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Bountiful~Uniquely~Creative-Profound...
It is always pleasant to read a poem that honors the language, (Blessed be all that understands that.) and it is ever great to read a poem that adds value to the language it is written; and enriches the sublime creative pages of Poetry.
"The Cruelest Mirror" has an outstanding imagery, and its philosophic symbolism is wisely refined to give its subjects dealt the sparkling colors of a flwaless polished alexandrite.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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niniBABY(:
Nephers ,awesome as always
keep doing what you're doing x]
loveya
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The fact that you said this was inspired by Macbeth actually kinda brought back all I had to do about Macbeth a couple of years ago, thinking of it from that point of view I think the poems works brilliantly as a sort of dissection of his mindset. How his ill-concieved lust for power and its disatrous consequences lead him to realise on some level he has become something he never wanted to be. (If that don't make sense then well I haven't read Macbeth for at least 2 years and I was never that big a fan of it lol.)
I never understood how Shakespeare got away with the ending, I mean that guy that kills Macbeth (forgotten his name lol) is still born of a woman, just in a different way, basically Shakespeare cheated lol.
Sorry I am rambling about the play and not the poem, hmm I thought it was great, with some inspired imagery and fantastic lines. The second stanza was amazing, "The wind ushers an unconscious sin,
Whispering with intentional innocence," Fantastic.
Sorry I do ramble a lot I realise lol
Phoenix =]
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THIS IS EXCELLENT...THE FLOW IS INCREDIBLY SMOOTH
THE SECOND TO LAST STANZA IS AWESOME
BRAVO
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You had much imagery throughout this piece that tickled my fancy. I really liked "a tide-pool soul"; left me for a good few moments thinking what someone so reactionary and stationary would be like; it twisted my brain for a while. And then there were the thoughts behind the piece itself. Thanks for sharing!!
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cute bb I love the way you write <3
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Opening line is really outstanding, sets the tone for the entire piece, the strength and terror at rest (like alion) is really a marvelous image. Madness has its way, usually...
Wonderful writing.
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I like this line the most:
"He’s drowning; he keeps breathing."
Who could do that?
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Green! (okay... that was random, anyway...)
for some weird reason i was reminded of the Greek Myth of Narcissus >.<
hmm. which part of Macbeth?
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