What was once a journey
through an unfamiliar path,
now a walk in the park,
a breeze in the trees.
With a past to make Satan
turn in his hell,
now a timeless treasure,
in which you have found.
A victim of lust,
I was lost in the game,
simply to find my true self,
at home, in your eyes.
Those who had touched me in the past,
merely slaves, tending to me until you arrived;
only there to fulfill a want, a need,
until you gave me life, gave me love.
Author notes
“People who have touched me in the past were only slaves tending to me until you arrived.”
--Author unknown.
I liked the quote so much, I had to bite off it a little in my write. I hope you enjoy, it came straight from the heart.
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A contest entry
- People who have touched me in the past were only slaves tending to me until you arrived by afroqban.
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Comments
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Liked the way you used a quote but still put your own stamp on this poem.Montey
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I love how this poem was written, and how it ties so well in with the quote at the end, I hope you win the contest. I honestly could not have enjoyed reading that poem more.
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Those who had touched me in the past,
merely slaves, tending to me until you arrived;
only there to fulfill a want, a need,
until you gave me life, gave me love.
I love those linez
This poem was wonderfully written I must say
You got some talent with wordz
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A superb pulling together of circumstance and acceptance, hope and love fulfilled.
I wish you the best in the contest, this sure reads like a winner
Dee
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This is tremendously powerful when put into context of the quote. I really like it. Fantastic job. Thanks very much for sharing.
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wooow that quote really bulled the whole piece together for me. Fantastic job, I really loved it.
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Lots of meat on this bone!
Beautiful! Sure to break anyone of their insecurities about their lover’s past. Not that they should have a problem to begin with, but it happens lets be real.
This part right here I can relate to:
“A victim of lust,
I was lost in the game,
simply to find my true self,
at home, in your eyes.”
Oh yes! This right here makes me think, brings me back to reality that hey, people have a past. Why in the hell should I be mad about what happened before me.
You really did an awesome job with this and I thank you much for sharing your talent in my contest. Good luck to you and much love.
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