My heart soars when I see you on
My mind stops racing , singing a song
My thoughts extreem yet true
My eistance, all for you
I smile thinking of a day we meet again
I only cry whn i miss you my friend
The Heart I see within your being
what you are inside where to begin
I love you and I miss you day by day
so these words i Must say,
I've known all along, from the start.
This poem epresses the true essence of my heart
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got a few errors, but nicely written poem. has a nice gentle flow to their rhythms and rhymes.
errors:
line 3: 'extreem' = extreme
line 4: 'eistance' = either you mean existence or essence
line 6: 'whn' = when
last line: 'epresses' = expresses -
Bravisimo! Wonderful, very heartfelt and sad.
but beautiful
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awe! this is so sweet! who ever this is written for is vry lucky to hav sme1 who cares for them like you do. i love it!!!!!!
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