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Betrayal

The darkest heavens open
With the grimest smile

Raindrops of blood fall like glass
Slicing, stinging, ripping through like acid

Poepl scream
And the angels for death smile

Bells ring with a brittle sound
And more angels gather to attack

The sun burns out
And the world is enveloped in a torturing cold

The mouth of the world opens wide
And fangs grin with victory

Death to all those who
Believe, love and dream

May your world betray you
And soak your souls in fear

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  • InvisibleMan silver member
    September 17

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    Ok...you were watching SpongeBob Squarepants with the contrast turned WAY up while playing Stairway to Heaven backwards,right?

    You know, while you are and always will be one of my favorite people here, I just don't like such dark pieces from beautiful young souls, my friend.

    Maybe you could write something FUN...just for me. I could use a laugh, Chica. :-)


    your biggest fan, the InvisibleMan